Comments on: (WIP) Suiren, Chapter Fourteen: [UNTITLED] Scene 3 – An Annoying Placeholder…

By: Eimii

Eimii — Tue, 17 Mar 2009 05:33:59 +0000

I suppose we’ll just have to see how it works out. Hopefully i can make his reaction believable – and amusing, later on ^_^….

By: paranoid android

paranoid android — Mon, 16 Mar 2009 12:08:40 +0000

while that would be great it seems very unlikely to happen, as asking for help is usually sasukes last resort and sakura appears to be one of the people sasuke is least willing to admit to that he needs help from.

he demonstrated this during the tree climbing exercise team 7 did. instead of asking sakura for help, even though she was clearly the most accomplished at it, he instead tried to get her guidance second hand from naruto, avoiding having to acknowledge sakura as a worthy team-mate.

so it will be interesting how you portray sasukes reaction to sakuras development, especially in lieu of asumas comparison of her to itachi.

By: Guile

Guile — Sun, 15 Mar 2009 02:31:04 +0000

Seeing Sasuke jealous of Sakura – or even better, seeking her out for training would be pretty great.

By: Eimii

Eimii — Thu, 12 Mar 2009 02:04:13 +0000

Hey now; explaining it would ruin the surprise, wouldn’t it? Aaaaall will become clear when the next part starts O_O…

By: KeiGinya

KeiGinya — Thu, 12 Mar 2009 01:59:55 +0000

I’m a bit confused now. Let’s get this straight:
Is Ino also eavesdropping on the conversation or not? (And I got this assumption from one of the comments — only, I’m not sure if it was yours or someone elses. You saying either Ino or Sasuke in this post sorta cemented it in my mind.)

On the guess that she ISN’T… then, do you mean on planning to skip that entire part and go to wherever Ino is, if you DO write her POV? Eh…

By: Eimii

Eimii — Thu, 12 Mar 2009 01:05:08 +0000

Now why would Ino be there? Sasuke may think of Kakashi as some sort of personal trainer, but i doubt Ino keeps tabs on her sensei with quite as much… dedication… ^_^;

By: Eimii

Eimii — Thu, 12 Mar 2009 00:57:42 +0000

Well, like i said, its all or nothing; I can’t write just part of if from his perspective. I’m not sure i’d call him ‘complicated,’ either. The way he goes about pursuing his goal seems to reflect a vast excess of pride and a distinct lack of critical thought on his part. I say ‘goal’ singular because i don’t really consider ‘revive my clan’ one of his goals – he certainly doesn’t treat it like one…

By: KeiGinya

KeiGinya — Wed, 11 Mar 2009 20:57:49 +0000

Depends. Does Ino know she has a fellow eavesdropper? Then you can cheat by having her describe Sasuke’s face or something.

Sasuke’s POV would be FANTASTIC to read but I sorta get that some (okay, a lot) people have trouble nailing his personality down. And I HAVE dabbled in several when I was bored (even though I claim I hate his Gary-Stu ways, but that’s more Kishimoto’s fault than the character’s). Lemme tell you, though, that young Sasuke immediately following the Uchiha Massacre is the hardest to write(kiddie angst is too hard for me to do since it’s more confusion than anything). The only difference between my 12 year old Sasuke and my Part II one is the fact older teen Sasuke has less of a whirlwind of thoughts and more of a realistic intensity (which angsty twelve year old Sasuke is still trying to grasp).

Sasuke’s point of view would be intriguing but Ino’s POV is more neutral, and might be more informative in the larger picture of Suiren. Ino would more likely dissect the scene as how a lot of other characters would interpret it, which is better for me in the long run than just Sasuke’s opinion of the talk.

:shrugs: Either way is fine, as long as you include SOME form of hint as to what Sasuke might be feeling.

By: Black-Petal

Black-Petal — Wed, 11 Mar 2009 14:05:54 +0000

Hmm, it would be really interesting to know what is going through Sasuke’s head right at that point. It would also be informative for his later choices, whenever or not he leaves like in the canon. Though I sympethise with you, trying to get into the little avengers head and portraying his thoughts and feeling in a satisfactory (realistic) way can’t be easy. He isn’t exacly an uncomplecated open person and he seldom explains is reasoning. At least everyone knows his goals.

However if you decide to write at least parts of the next scene from his point of view I bet it will be great to read even if you don’t quite nail his character. Don’t worry to much about it.