There is an explanation for why i haven’t posted new revision chapters for Suiren here yet, really! Two more revision chapters, “Days,” and “Mission,” have made it to the FFML since my last post; these were formerly titled “Morning” and “Afternoon.” Along with the most recent chapter, ”Blood,” these are the only chapters that don’t currently appear on the blog in some form.
The reason for this is that, after sending them to the FFML, i discovered that they both need some pretty significant work ^_^;. Rather than posting the “FFML Version” here, only to later post a “Revised FFML Version,” before finally posting a “Blog Version,” i decided to do those corrections before posting- except i haven’t found time to do them yet -_-;…
So, to tide you over until i can get around to that, here are links to the FFML archive where these chapters can be found. Pay no attention to the chapter numbers listed on them; the chapter numbering is different between the blog and the FFML. Properly, they are:
EDIT: Now on the site- yay!
Enjoy! I’ll try and do some more updates to this blog soon (such as answers to the posts from readers - i haven’t forgotten about you!), but i’m going to be really busy for the next little while, so please bear with me a little longer…
~Eimii
^^ It’s good to know you haven’t abandoned this story, especially since it’s so amazing! XD It had been quite a while since you posted anything, so I was wondering whether you stopped writing, or found a major plothole, or somesuch… But it makes a little more sense now. I almost want to hope that your life becomes less exciting so you have more time to revise, but I.. well, I’m not *that* mean. xD;;
Is the FFML version of these chapters different from the ff.net version?
Thanks, and please update (sometime xD) soon! XDXD ^^
Wow!! your writing keeps on getting better and better. I can’t wait for your next post, you sure have sped up with your updates and i REALLY appreciate it!
Well i hope you continue! i just can’t wait to see how you’ll continue with the story.
Oh i have a question.
Is Kiba, Shino, and Hinata going on the mission? Cause you wrote that only Sakura and Kurenai?
“If security is such an issue, why have I not been assigned a support team?” the red-eyed woman countered testily.
….
I have been ordered to escort Haruno Sakura to the
Village of the Hidden Sand in the Wind Country, and you have been ordered to cooperate with me.
Does I mean that its only her or her team as well? and she says she’s going to the Hyuuga compound is it to say that she has to go on a mission without Hinata or that she needs to get permission for Hinata to go to Wind Country like how you put it in your last revision?
….
“…I’m writing because I have accepted a request from the village council to accompany Kurenai-sensei on a mission…”
So i’m guessing your Blood Chapter will be totally different…
Having read the original Suiren on FFNet an age ago, I was so glad to see that you’re updating this story elsewhere! In my opinion version is much stronger – both because more effort is expended on explaining Sakura’s kinjutsu, and because you’re spent a lot more time on Ino and Sakura’s relationship. It felt odd to have Ino drop so far into the background for a large part of the first version, when she was Sakura’s initial motivation to get stronger.
I hope we’ll be seeing more Anko soon! And more of Yoshinari. Off-kilter Sakura works well with a straight-man for her antics.
It would be nice to get more idea of Sakura’s team’s reaction to how she’s changed, but somehow I feel like the story will come to a close once they’re all done their respective training periods. Just a hunch! I’m curious to see where things go from here.
Ahhhh Yoshinari how I love thee…. I thought kiss of death would be a good name for Sakura’s Kinjutsu but oh well.
Sakura seems to be getting to know the people in ANBU better , I can just imangine the look on her teamates faces if they caught her conversing with some of them in ANBU uniform ( Asano’s uniform actually) they would be dumbfounded.
Sakura and Yoshinari are so cute together and she could learn alot from him (no not in that way! Well then again what with the stuff the folks on FFML are insinuating it could be in ‘that’ way.)
Personally, I think it would be hilarious for her temporary tattoo to be found out by someone she knows (Kurenai, for example) while she still has it.
I’m not sure if Hinata and Kurenai’s other genin will be going to Sand with them (ala the first version) or not.
Either way – it’s coming along very well. The original was already one of my favorite Naruto fic, and the new scenes just make it more solid.
By the way – I’d love to see you post some of your other fanfic here.
Shattered Hearts Upon the Road was an excellent ranma fic, and it’s incredibly difficult to find the whole thing.
Hrm, just thought I’d point out that the first link is taking me to some bleach fanfic.
Hrm, I wonder how peace talks will go with one of the kazekage’s family prisoner in Konoha..
Ah well, so far it has all been an enjoyable read, which is probably useless to someone looking to revise and improve, but true.